I really enjoyed this piece. The details included and the detached tone, or at least that is how it came off to me, where very interesting. I'm curious do you intend to keep the length of silence at the end of your piece?
This is a very memorable piece about friendship, I like how it's a story thats also like a memory of a friend, the word tense makes it that way I think, p.s. if the silence at the end represents the awkward silence in the story, make it more dramatic?
I really enjoyed this piece. The details included and the detached tone, or at least that is how it came off to me, where very interesting. I'm curious do you intend to keep the length of silence at the end of your piece?
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I actually thought the opposite of Hannah, i thought the details made this feel very sort of intimate, and sweet.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very memorable piece about friendship, I like how it's a story thats also like a memory of a friend, the word tense makes it that way I think, p.s. if the silence at the end represents the awkward silence in the story, make it more dramatic?
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